The sight of the boom! Left a everlasting bone thrilling chill down my back as if, a soft wind was blowing down your spine. The wind blew so softly; identical to the wind from a door opening. The slightly dimmed light made the surrounding picture perfect. The clouds settled resembling mountains of marshmallows. The cooling fresh air scented the surrounding open area, like a crisp fresh blosssumed flower. Leaving a feeling of calmness in the spirits of the clouds. Hindering the space which is left exiled from the rest of the world. While the time seems to never pass with the still frosted moments left by the clouds.
2 comments:
wow i really like it! it was really creative and describtive (totally spelt that wrong :)) anyway it was really good, i liked the line that said "the clouds settled resembling mountains of marshmallows" really good line. you might want to...i dont know i really liked it. i wouldn't change anything.
Yeah that it was really good! I liked it. You were really descriptive, and you had really good metaphors and analogies. It sounded as though you put alot of effort into it, and it was really good overall. The only thing i would change is adding more. I think you should add more.
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